Friday Fiction with Ronovan Writes Prompt #11 Entries: THE LINKS

Talk about a great prompt idea. This one, or something like it, may show up again. Wow. Some great entries. If you’ve never read the entries of these Fiction Reviews before, start with this one. They are short, and very good.

A Must Read designation does NOT mean an entry is necessarily better than the other entries. It means that entry clicked with me in some way in that moment I read it.

The order appearing is the order in which the entry was received.

GL below stands for the reading Grade Level. Harry Potter is a GL of around 5. Tolkien is around GL 6.5. Passive Sentence percentage is included as Active Sentences are considered the preferred form of writing by most editors and publishers. Active moves the story along. Passive is not always bad. Sometimes a story works that way, perhaps through the language of a person or the type of story. Even then, keep the percentage low.

The Writers with The Links

The Prompt for the Challenge was:

January 22, which is Friday’s date, is Celebration of Life Day.

  • Take a moment in your life of which you would celebrate and use that as inspiration for a no more than 750 word story, but don’t let that stop you if you are enjoying yourself and the story is going well. (SUGGESTED)
  • If you are not doing a series, write the story as if the characters were animals living in the roles of humans. An example would be the policemen might be German Shepherds and other Police type dogs. (REQUIRED if not in the middle of writing a series.) OR
  • Use the same experience for a story in one of the following Genres: Science Fiction, Fantasy, Thriller. (Required if not using the above.)

Bella’s Reward
Annette (Annette’s Place)
A new member and a first time ever fiction writer. A great start with Tiny Dance from Elton John as her song choice. I can see Elton in the story. 270 words, 4.0 GL, and 3% passive sentence structure.
Hello! I am new to blogging and I have fallen in LOVE with it! I am 47 years young and have 3 grown son’s I adore. I am a fairly new grandma also of two kids. I simply believe they hung the moon! I was in… [read the rest of the story].”


A Must Read.Golden Earrings
TJ Paris (La vie est trop courte pour boire du mauvais vin)
TJ is insane. Certifiable. There is no doubt. No one can convince me otherwise. And it’s not because he chose Peggy Lee’s Golden Earrings. 293 words, 12.1 GL, and 0% passive sentence structure. @Roccoco_a_GoGo

Ludwig’s Friday Morning
Kim Russell (Writing in North Northfolk)
What a nice story. It sent me to the search engines to read about one of the characters. 358 words, 4.3 GL, and 10% passive sentence structure. @kim88110

Fear no Tear
Neel Anil Panicker (NeelWritesBlog)
An emotional charged piece. I think a lot of men go through something like this. Perhaps not the end result but the events through the story. 897 words, 6.1 GL, and 1% passive sentence structure.  

A Must Read. The Perfect Illusion-Part 4
Nandini Bharadwaj (Pages That Rustle)
I’m not certain I’ve ever had an error free entry before. Whoa. I recommend you listen to the song used for this one, even if you aren’t a fan. I did. Excellent. 292 words, 4.0 GL, and 3% passive sentence structure.

1000hoursleft (Work in Progress)
You’ll never guess what this one is about from the title, and it may even take you several lines in to figure it out. 283 words, 8.7 GL, and 7% passive sentence structure.

Teenage Lobotomy
by Teresa Smeigh (Writing is my Life)
I haven’t even read it yet and I’m already scared by the title. Okay, it turned out better than the title led me to expect. There are no zombies in the story! 281 words, 2.1 GL, and 0% passive sentence structure. @TeresaSmeigh

Swan Song
by Kat Myrman (like mercury colliding…)
Different. Wonder if she’s ever seen Hudson Hawk? 294 words, 3.6 GL, and 2% passive sentence structure. @kat_myrman

Within the Sounds of Silence
Clarence Holm (PrairieChat)
Dude gone dark on me. Well done. 288 words, 5.2 GL, and 4% passive sentence structure.

Just Friends?
A Must Read Ritu (But I Smile Anyway…)
Well this is well done. Ritu keeps bringing the goods each week. 311 words, 3.7 GL, and 3% passive sentence structure. @PhantomGiggler

The Moon’s Death
Geetha Balvannanathan (Geetha Balvannanathan’s Blog)
Another take on celestial beings. Such a creative take on the prompt. It amazes me where a suggestion can take a person. 366 words, 6.8 GL, and 10% passive sentence structure. @geethap2007

When the thorn bush turns white.
A Must Read Ruby Manchanda (Whispering Thoughts)
This short story could be about a young man in many parts of the world … during so many different eras. I enjoyed the simple quaintness of this, if that’s the correct way of saying it. Something peaceful about it in a strange way. Strange because in a way it shouldn’t be peaceful. 239 words, 5.2 GL, and 5% passive sentence structure.

I don’t hurt any more.
Janni Styles (JanniStyles1)
Probably a story familiar to some in a life they know. A shame really, but true. You can call me Sheila if you like. I’ve been there. 300 words, 2.8 GL, and 0% passive sentence structure. @jannistyles1

A Chance to Heaven
Wes Hollifield (NearlyWes)
That was unexpected. An interesting ride to an interesting ending? 221 words, 5.7 GL, and 11% passive sentence structure. @Nearly_Wes

Another and here we are again.
A Must Read Florence Thum (Meanings and Musings)
Very nice. Not sure what else to say. 342 words, 3.3 GL, and 2% passive sentence structure. @FTTHum

Always Searching for Something
A Must Read Natalia Erehnah (Weaving Gold)
A very strong entry and part of a novel in progress. Great suspense and sense of urgency. 170 words, 4.3 GL, and 0% passive sentence structure. Not a single grammar or spelling error of any sort, even stylistically acceptable errors. Impressive. @weavinggold

De Composition
A Must Read Bill Engleson (Writings)
Okay, this guy is a serious writer. But I knew that already. The way he links together the lyric and that ending … nice. 248 words, 7.0 GL, and 6% passive sentence structure. @billmelaterplea

Broken Heart Drive
A Must Read Michelle LuNato (Chasing Life and Finding Dreams)
If this woman doesn’t write a Contemporary Romance, it’s a waste. 455 words, 2.4 GL, and 0% passive sentence structure. @MichelleLunato

Ronovan Hester is an author, with his debut historical adventure novel Amber Wake: Gabriel Falling due out Valentine’s Day of 2016. He shares his life through his blog His love of poetry, authors and community through his online world has lead to a growing Weekly Haiku Challenge, a new Friday Fiction Writing Prompt Challenge, and the creation of a site dedicated to book reviews, interviews and author resources known as

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15 thoughts on “Friday Fiction with Ronovan Writes Prompt #11 Entries: THE LINKS

  1. Thanks Ron for the pingback. I have never seen Hudson Hawk so I googled it. Not sure what your reference meant but I’m hoping you didn’t think this week’s entry was a horrible flop! 😊 “Different” I get…I get that a lot actually. 😊

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  2. Thank you for the ‘Must Read’ tag and your valuable inputs. 🙂
    I took your suggestion and got Grammarly, which I found very useful. Being a student, I can’t afford the Premium version, but the basic one should suffice, in my opinion. Thanks for this tip as well. 🙂

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    • If you look at the top of the post you’ll see a better definition, but PSS is a sentence structure that either slows the story down or interrupts the flow. It doesn’t push the story forward. GL, is Grade Level of reading. Around grade 5 is where most fiction is. That doesn’t mean people can’t read higher, but to enjoy reading you want to be able to escape into it rather than run to a dictionary or get caught up in the big word usage.

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